The second evidence you lack of analyzing. You should prove more about. Your thesis is a little bit unclear what is your evidence proving. Use more descriptive words so that make your evidence stronger.
I think you should write more information in the second evidence. I think you should also use more discriptive words so you sentence can be more esier to read and have strong support idea
The second evidence you lack of analyzing. You should prove more about. Your thesis is a little bit unclear what is your evidence proving. Use more descriptive words so that make your evidence stronger.
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ReplyDeleteI think you should write more information in the second evidence. I think you should also use more discriptive words so you sentence can be more esier to read and have strong support idea
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